My Writing

We have been learning about how to mark our own writing using our matrix and how to use ideas and organisation.

TITLE: __LEAGUE___________________________________________

Planning

1. Warming up

2. Playing

3. Celebrating

4.

5.

Writing

The boys make their way to the field and start there drills 1,2,3,4 up they do there shuttles twice they also did truck and trailer they follow each other for about 5 minutes the boys have 10 minutes so they did there last drill that was relays 10 minutes was up time to play our first game was the Pawarenga broncos  let's go we huddle up and get information from the coach then all we hear is “TIGERS TFL” after that the game was on.

The first ball was passed they passed the ball not 1,,2,3,4,5 or 6 times then the first try was scored by the Tigers and then the goal was scored also the score was 6 Nil . Time went by and the Pawarenga Broncos had scored twice but they had missed their goals. The score was 6 to 8 but we eventually ended up getting three tries and two goals so the score was  36 to 8 there was 10 seconds on the clock 10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1  “We won” everyone screamed and celebrated.

Marking

Ideas	Points	Comment
	3	I will work on my writing and put more details in with my ideas
Miss Baker	3	You have a few simple ideas about a topic and some detail. Make sure you write about something that you can really write about with lots of ideas and detail.